In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, most families find it necessary for both

parents

to do a job to meet the demands of their

life

. A chunk of individuals opines that

this

will ease the

life

of their

children

whilst others are sceptical about it. I;

however

, believe that

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of

parents

have

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vital

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part in the

teenagers

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teenager's

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life

.

To begin

with,

children

who come from families where both

parents

work, lead to comfortable lifestyle

such

as they have

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the luxury

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to travel due to extra money.

For instance

,

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the father‘s

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income

pay

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the house expenses, the

mother’s

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mothers

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can be used for extra-curricular activities or other luxuries.

Moreover

, both working

parents

provide better educational opportunities as these

children

have access to advanced technology gadgets and can hire personal tutors for subjects they find incomprehensible.

Lastly

, families whose basic demands are met and have

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stable income,

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lead a happy lifestyle .

Hence

,

this

will help to create a strong family bond.

On the other hand

,

parents

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who are

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so busy

to achieve

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achieving

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their financial goals

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often left with no time to spend with their

children

.

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instance

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after a hectic day at work

parents

are exhausted and go straight to bed for rest . There is no time to guide and look after their

children

demands or needs.

This

problem

lead

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children

to seek advice from Their peers or television or sometimes they have even

join

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a gang,

this

increase the rate of school dropouts.

Hence

,

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the balance

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between family and work is mandatory for the well-being of the

children

. In conclusion, a luxurious

life

is not sufficient

children

need their

parents

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guidance and support as they grow. It is the responsibility of the

parents

to look after the behaviour of their

children

and guide them

accordingly

.