some people feel that entertainers are paid too much money do you agree or disagree which other types of jobs should be highly paid ?

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universal fact , each and every individual thinks that he/ she is underpaid . But when it comes to actors or cricketers I personally feel that they are provided more than they genuinely deserve. I totally agree that cricketers
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to practice for
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duration and they have to maintain their fitness as well as actors have to wear prosthetic makeup for long periods , have to rehearse
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scripts and act every scene with perfect expression though they are paid much more than other hardworking professionals. Entertainers
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in
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luxurious and comfortable life and they are provided security too.
On the other hand
who secures the whole nation "army professionals " are given
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amount of wages . They are the real heroes of the country so they deserve much more respect and must be
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amount of salary and
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security for their family's future needs . Sometimes I genuinely feel that most hardworking, talented and
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people are not provided as much they deserve, At
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I wish every person should be paid according to their working hours, their mental and physical ability as well as their skills and knowledge. In every
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every individual must be paid according to their eligibility .
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