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Some people think that it is a waste of time for high school students to study literature such as novels and poems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #waste #time #school #students #study #literature #novels #poems
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It is argued that
literature
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 is useless for high school students as a studying subject. I totally disagree with
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 opinion, because books and poems increase teenagers’ emotional intellect and broaden their
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.
Literature
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 writings always include
life
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experience
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 and describe emotional aspects of their characters; it can teach
young
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the young
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 generation important
life
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 lessons and help them to understand themselves. It is
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 efficient way to teach teenagers about their personalities
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 because they can link themselves with characters of the writings and think about their own decisions in those situations, which leads them to be an adult
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, I and my siblings have been grown on stories about brave Kazakh heroes and their adventures, which made us more confident about ourselves.
Literature
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 can
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 help youths to gain useful knowledge about
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 world from a variety of spheres, which is extremely important for future
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 and career growth. A lot of young people often struggle
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 their
life
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 path or
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, due to lack of information.
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, if they study
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, they will exactly know what kind of job is appropriate for them.
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, they can learn skills
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 as oratory that possibly will make them a better college or manager to work with. Almost every great man or woman used
literature
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 for self-education, starting from Napoleon that read more than 100 books in his
life
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, ending with Winston Churchill, whose political views and oratory skills is a result of reading an incredible number of books. In conclusion,
literature
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 is the same subject as math or biology, which can teach students to important
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 skills and make them emotionally stable adults.
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