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Some people think that there shoul be complete ban on forms of advertising do you agree

#people #shoul #ban #forms
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Many of the
individual
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beleive
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believe
believes
 that there must be
proper
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 prohibition on all kind of endorsement I believe that
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 trend should be changed To commence with there
are
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plenty
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reason
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reasons
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 for disagreement
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 and foremost reason is loss of publicity the
adds
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ads
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 provide the knowledge of products when the
adds
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ads
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ban
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then
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 in
public
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the public
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 decline of knowledge the
adds
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ads
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 provide the quality of products and individuals aware about the product up to time
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 new mobile phone and cars adds aware to
people
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upto
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up to
 time
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 in case adds
ban
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 they in
people
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 less awareness about the new product
Fruthermore
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Furthermore
 nowadays
myraid
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myriad
 companies telecasted new endorsement
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 as some
people
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 drinking
a
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apply
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alcohol whereas adds about the alcohol harmful for health
hence
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 individual decided to leave drugs and alcohol
this
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 types of knowledge given through the advertisement in public To conclude after analysing above mentioned advertising is good for
people
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 I personally believe that advertising never
ban
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 in future but some
people
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 think that advertising should be
ban
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 in the future
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