The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides a cheap and clear replacement for existing energies. The benefits far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many superpowers regard nuclear weapons as a deterrent from provoking
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world war. While I cannot deny that there are still shortcomings if
this
power
is not used with due considerations, we should acknowledge that
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nuclear has become an inseparable part of our lives after considering it as a low-cost and
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friendly resource.
First
off, we can look at the drawbacks
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weaponization of
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nuclear. It is generally acknowledged that as far back as during
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World War II, Americans were the
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to master
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terrifying energy and
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nuclear
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weapon. A well-known example is
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nuclear bomb which was dropped by the U.S. military over Hiroshima, Japan, leading to
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devastating damage on
this
city and bringing an end
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the war. As a consequence, hundreds of people were died or have left permanent impairments.
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, the entire city is polluted by nuclear waste and
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longer suitable for human life until
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decades.
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, it is reasonable that people at that age only saw the repercussions brought by it. In spite of
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noted above, with the advancement of
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chemical science, nuclear
power
is increasingly prevalent. The electricity generated by nuclear has gradually in place of coal
power
generation, the contributory factor is that it is purer than coal with moderated usage. To expand
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, governments found that it is more affordable than other forms of
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, including wind, solar, and tide, thanks to the enormous
power
possessed by the atom itself. In brief, the governments are promoting nuclear-powered electricity to the public as well. As I have related, the downsides of nuclear may deserve public attention concerning it be used as
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weapon, I still maintain
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notion that these shortcomings cannot downplay the great contribution towards
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in the modern era.
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