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More and more people today are drinking sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons for this? What are the solutions to make people drink less?

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Nowadays, More and more
people
 are drinking sugar-based
drinks
such
 as coke, soda, soft
drinks
, energy
drinks
. Especially Teenagers and young adults
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in particular
 tend to consume these sugar-based
drinks
 on a daily demand basis.
This
 essay will illustrate the
reasons
 for
this
 phenomenon and offer some feasible solutions to reduce energy
drinks
 consumption. There are various
reasons
 Why sugar-based
drinks
 consumption has risen dramatically in recent years. One possible explanation is that Most modern jobs are required require us to spend great concentration and effort to be more and more productive but working or learning for a long period.
As a result
, we were become tired and lost lose concentration on working.
Therefore
,
People
 drink sugar-based
drinks
 to boost energy for the body and enhance their focus on working. Another reason worth mentioning is that these
drinks
allows
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 us to stay awake to work so and,
as a result
, these sugar-based
drinks
 are beneficial to us.
However
 some pestiferous substances in sugar-based
drinks
such
 as caffeine, aspartame can lead have led to the fact that more
people
 are suffering from obesity disease than in
a
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over the few recent years ago. ANh suggest em bỏ câu cuối (
However
,...) vì trong câu này em đang đưa ra Negative effects của việc tiêu thụ đồ uống có đường => Nội dung này đề không yêu cầu, đề chỉ yêu cầu em đưa ra các
REASONS
 tại sao người ta lại uống sugary
drinks
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Although
 reducing sugar-based
drinks
 consumption is a difficult task. But , there are many solutions to encourages
people
 to stop drinking those
drinks
 regularly. The
first
 possible solution is that the government should raise sales tax on those
drinks
.
This
 can result in an increase in their prices, thereby discouraging several
people
 from consuming them. The
second
 approach is that we can provide with the opportunity to be
people
's awareness of all adverse impacts on health from drinking it should be raised by organizing campaigns to encourage
people
 to follow a healthy diet and refrain from drinking sugar-based
drinks
.  In conclusion, the essay indicates many
reasons
 to explain Why sugar-based
drinks
 have been consumed by many
people
, .
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 Despite these causes, increasing sales tax on sugar-based
drinks
 and running healthy diet campaigns to raise consumer awareness of their health are two feasible solutions that mitigate the problem.
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