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All students should study a foreign language in school, starting in their earliest grades. To What extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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It is believed
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many individuals that
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schoolchildren
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children
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 should
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 to a foreign
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 other than their mother tongue early on,
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 academic years. In my opinion, I completely agree with the proposed notion because
children
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 have greater learning ability at a very
younger
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age
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.
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, when a foreign tongue is introduced early, they will not feel burdened by an additional subject in secondary
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Children
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 have more potential to learn new stuff at a younger
age
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.
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 is similar to infants who do not know any word when they are born, but quickly pick it up from their parents and adults.
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, in Sri Lanka, before the 1990s English
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 was introduced to
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children
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 when they were in high
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,
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, after much
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 the educators realized that primary
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 students were able to grasp it much faster in high
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 itself.
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, it is more beneficial to
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language
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 skills
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their
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 young
age
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.
In addition
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, high
school
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 students need to learn a plethora of advanced subjects during their academic years. If a foreign
language
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 is introduced,
in addition
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 to those subjects, it will be an extra burden for them, and they will have no
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 to master it by the
time
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 they are ready to graduate.
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, the majority of Sri Lankan students do not choose to learn foreign
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such
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 as French,
Japanese
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, when
those
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 are introduced to their Ordinary and
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 level curriculum
due to
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 the extra effort required to master those
languages
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 within a shorter
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 period.
To sum up
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,
children
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 have more potential to learn a new
language
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 when it is introduced at a young
age
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.
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, it allows them more
time
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 to master foreign
languages
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 when those
languages
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 are introduced during their primary academic years.
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, I support the idea of introducing a foreign
language
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 to a child when he or she is more adaptable.

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