Children ore facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social, and commercial, perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and which measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

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Nowadays,
children
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have to face more and more
pressure
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from academic, social and commercial challenges. There are several causes behind
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phenomenon and
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several implements which can reduce
stress
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the stress
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children
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. To commence with,
reason
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the reason
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behind
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phenomenon. There are several causes
which
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that
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lead
pressures
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to pressures
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on
children
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First
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The first
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and foremost reason is
comparison
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a comparison
the comparison
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with
other student
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another student
other students
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. To explain it, parents
compares
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their kid's performance with other kid's in academic results and other perspectives. To exemplify, when people see the
hordings
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hoardings
hoarding
and advertisement of results they pressurise their
off-spring
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offspring
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to achieve that type of result.
Secondly
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, busy schedule in student life. To explain it, from
nersury
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nursery
mercury
parents send their
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child
childs
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children
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into school and
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in personal
tution
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tuition
classes. So,
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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can not get sufficient time for other
activities
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such
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as outdoor and indoor games. These are the main reason behind
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pressure
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the pressure
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on
children
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. There are several implements
which
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that
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tackle
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problem.
Firstly
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,
government
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the government
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should impose
stict
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strict
rules in
school's
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the school's
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timetable for some portion of extra activity rather than academic activity. These
type
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types
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of
activities
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release
stress
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the stress
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of
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students and
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get chances to show their skills in extra
activities
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. So, they get chances to show and improve their other skills with
guidance
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the guidance
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of teachers in their interested area. These are the main implement
which
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that
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can reduce
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pressure
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the pressure
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of
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on
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children
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. To conclude, these are some causes behind the
pressure
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on
children
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such
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as
comparision
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comparison
with other students in academics and busy daily schedule of academics. Whereas steps
shoulid
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should
be taken to solve
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problem
such
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as strict rules in school for extra
activities
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.
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