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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution
Rise
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The rise
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 in
price
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the price
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 of fossil
fuel
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fuels
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such
 as
petrol
 is
the
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a
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 good way to reduce traffic and
pollution
 problems. I partially agree with
this
 statement. There are some positive and negative aspects of hike in
petrol
price
 which will be discussed adequately in ensuing paragraphs. To commence with,
reason
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the reason
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 behind
agreement
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the agreement
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.
First
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 and foremost reason is
reduction
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a reduction
the reduction
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 in
use
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the use
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 of fossil
fuel
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fuels
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. Nowadays,
world
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the world
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 face
crisis
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a crisis
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 of fossil fuel due to
high
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the high
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 usage of petroleum
products
. If
petrol
price
 is increasing
then
 it may
be result
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result
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 in less use of
petrol
 that
result
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results
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 into less traffic problem and
pollution
.
For example
, if
price
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the price
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 of
petrol
 surged
then
 people change their way from private
transport
 to public
transport
 that automatically
reduce
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reduces
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 carbon
immision
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emission
immission
immersion
 and global warming problems.
Secondly
, moving upward of
petrol
price
 increase revenue for the government. That revenue can be used for the latest and
pollution free
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pollution-free
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 public
transport
 system.
In contrast
,
hike
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a hike
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 in
price
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the price
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 of petroleum
products
have
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has
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 some negative impacts on society.
For example
, in
rural
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a rural
the rural
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area
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areas
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 of developing
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countries
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country
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,country
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 there are
not
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no
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such
 facilities of public
transport
 so, they rely on
the
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apply
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private
transport
.
In addition
, they
have
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do have
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 not sufficient income to afford the rise in
petrol
price
.
Secondly
, essential manufacturing companies have to use
transportation
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a transportation
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system
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systems
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 for
the raw materials
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the transportation of the raw materials
the transportation of the raw material
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transportation
.
Increase
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An increase
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 in
transportation
cost
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costs
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 leads
costly
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to costly
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products
 which
also
 affect
middle class
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middle-class
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 society. To conclude, there are several positives and negatives of
this
 statement. Positive results of higher
price
is
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are
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reduction
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a reduction
the reduction
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 in
pollution
 and usage of
local
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the local
a local
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transport
 system. Whereas negative results
is
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are
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 costly essential
products
 and
transportation
sytem
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system
 of rural area.
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