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The personal information of many individuals is held by large internet companies and organizations. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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As we live in modern technology developed world, our private
information
 is kept by some mass associations and businesses. There is a gap between If the advantages of dominance privacy have the privilege of disadvantages. At
first
, as usage of social media and
internet
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are
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 growing at a great rate, at the same time the individual
confidency
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confidence
 are controlled by some
goverment
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government
 and business organizations. Because if
internet
 users are not regulated the number of
cyber
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cybercrime
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crime
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crimes
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 magnifies hugely.
For instance
, If
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cyber
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cybercrime
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crime
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crimes
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committed
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 the police officers or some other
goverment
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government
 officials may catch the perpetrator through its IP
adress
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address
 or some
information
 obtained from several
organization
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organizations
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.
Therefore
 it is beneficial If personal details
monitored
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 by organizations.
Secondly
,there are minuses to post or give private details onto
internet
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 due to businesses that
uses
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information
 for their benefit. They may manipulate people through their preferences posted on
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internet
. To exemplify, If the sales managers attain some
information
 about
product
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 preferences of users, they use
this
 data for attracting new customers. As the
result
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 it may cause consumers to be deceived by their own secret sharing
internet
 posts. To conclude,
opennes
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openness
 give us
more
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a more
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 secure place to live
however
 it may cause
unconventional
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 situation or consequences for human beings.
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