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Some people think that newspapers are the best media to learn and get information from, while others believe that the Internet is a better source. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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it is argued that
newspapers
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 are the best
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 to investigate
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 and learn new lessons,
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 others think that the
internet
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 is more reliable and easier to access,in my perspective
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 is
better
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source
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 compare to old version media like
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newspapers
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 are old fashion media that are still popular for some adults because they get used to it and some people are involved with them and it becomes like a habit to have morning coffee in
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,but a thousand pages of
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 daily can cause severe danger for planet earth because it will speed up forest eating as well as trash capacities.
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,each article of
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 have
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 specific writer who is under the authority of the government or political group,so it can harm information validation,
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 in Iran newspaper and magazines are straightly under government monitor so you can not learn or investigate any information which is not censored.
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,newspaper have a mental impact on readers wich keen them to buy it and get details from it but in my ,view they are not a reliable
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.
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, the
internet
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 is the best
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 to gain knowledge because it is the most update-
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 all around the world and people can access the
internet
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 only by one click in their home without any demand to leave their space to grab the printed media,which can decrease the amount of trees devastation so as
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 result we will not injury the nature to reach the piece of
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,aslo
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 in
internet
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 and virtual environments are really new and maybe they have been updated a few minutes ago,
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 when Ukraine plane crash happened about one year ago,only by browsing on the
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 we were able to grab the
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.so in my ,viewpoint the net is always the easiest and the most reliable origin. in conclusion, the crowd can reach
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 throughout both sources but
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 benefits compare to
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 are outweigh and if we had not the net to learn and get basics of science and
news
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 we would not have technology like today version.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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