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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this ? Do you think it is a positive or negative development ?

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Nowadays, businesses usually emphasise that their products are new in some ways in their advertising.
This
 is the result of harsh competition in the market. From my point of view, I would say that it might an advantage for those businesses but it is a negative development for product's consumer. In
these recent
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this recent year
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year
, we can not refuse that an advertisement took a huge role in consumerism's business for inviting people to buy their goods,
moreover
this
 method always works. There are plenty
competitors
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 in the market. So it could
forced
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 a company to actually inventing some new features before
new
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a new
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 product
launched
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is launched
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.
For example
, the most famous technology's equipment brand "Apple" launch their new versions of
smart phone
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smartphone
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 "
Iphone
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iPhone
" every
year
. They try to upgrade their design and add more functions for improving
quality
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 of cell
phone
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phones
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. The interesting advertising would easily gain a lot of attention from the audience.
Furthermore
, it
quite
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 challenging to meet the audience expectation.
For instance
, the well-known women's underwear line, Victoria Secret, create a fashion show every
year
 to illustrate their newest design. Whilst, they just cancel the show
last
year
 because of a decreasing of buying rate, no more
popularity
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 among the customer. Because the process of re-use and mix and match with their own's old design
then
 re-present in
new
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the new
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 package does not meet the audience expectation. In conclusion, I would say advertisements
these day
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this day
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 have a mega impact on us due to purchasing's
decision
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decisions
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. The way that these businesses are improving their product to get over their market's competitor and become a consumer's choice is an advantage for customers.
Although
,
a
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mislead or exaggerate advertising is still unexceptional, especially the
royal
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loyal
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 customers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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