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In many countries, women no longer feel the feel need to get married. Some believe that this is because women abale to earn their own income and therefore do not require the financial security that marriage can bring. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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It is commonly believed that in some nations females do not feel like getting married . It is considered by many that ladies are now becoming financially independent and they no longer want to become
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 dependent which they believe marriage can bring them. I completely agree with the given statement and there are two reasons why I think so and they will be explained in the
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First
 of all, occupation can
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 their personal needs. It is a
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 fact that female communities are nowadays more educated and qualified enough to work in large and as well as
small
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organisation
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.
Although
 the ratio of
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 workforce is less as compared to males it is evident that in the future
this
 proportion will increase substantially and
women
 will empower themselves by means of livelihood.
For instance
, China has the largest number of unmarried female workers in the world due to
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education
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 background. In short, good education and better wages help
women
 to lead
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 independent life.
Secondly
, lack of financial support in
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marriage life. Needless to say that in many countries men do not support their spouse after the marriage because of selfishness and low salaries
as a result
 of which females are
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compelled
 to work. To
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 daily wage earners find it tedious to
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 the household requirements due to inflation in the economy.
Therefore
, scarcity of funds and lack of monetary resources from the husbands push the
women
 to become independent. In conclusion, in the modern era where financial stability has become a
powerfull
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powerful
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women
, it is clear that
women
 do not wish to get
marry
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 just for
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domestic work.
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