The influence of human on the world’s eco system is leading to the extinction of species and loss boo- diversity. What are the primary causes of bio diversity? What solutions can be suggest?

The raising amount of population
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responsible for destroying the ecological- diversity which leads to the
extromination
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extermination
of plants and animals. The reason
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this
problem is extensive deforestation and imbalance
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life. The solution is
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awareness and using technology. To
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with, the predominate reason is that, increasing
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to feed
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population. For that reason, people cut down forests and making farming lands.
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, many trees and species are lost their habitats and it
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towards
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destruction. For an instance, a recent government survey
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found that 60% of forests land were disappear due to increasing food production.
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, most of the nature
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resources
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oceans and seas. To meet the extensive demand
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oil and gas, they pump out very frequently using heavy machinery. It creates noises and
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poisonous chemicals.
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many aquatic animals and plants die out. To
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tackle
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problem the government should launch a publicity campaign in the digital platform and in the school to educate people about deforestation. The government should take help
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new technology like, genetic engineering in food production which assist to increase
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of farming with
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amount of time.
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imposes higher taxes using on natural resources which makes people
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demotivate to use gas and oil
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as
well
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introduce renewable sources. To conclude
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, human activities are
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threat
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our planet. Only
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social
awareness can save our world
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destructions
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