Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students find a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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job and higher salary their parents think the same,and nowadays competition is too high because of time waste in that
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student would face difficulty in their future. To conclude,teachers should teach
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technology because it will
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them to get a good job and better life in future.
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