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Many people make friends through social sites and chat rooms. Others believe that it is not a good idea to make friends without meeting them face to face. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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With the development of internet technology, a lot of online
chat
application
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 emerged, lots of people like
like
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it, because it provides a new approach to communicate with others, and
than
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 make friends. Like most
of
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apply
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new
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 stuff, it usually brings some problems, together with benefits. In
this
 essay, I would like to
disscuss
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discuss
 the pros and cons of it
,
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apply
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 and give
me
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my
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opinion
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an opinion
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 on it.
First
 of all, online
chat
room
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rooms
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 provide a lot of
convinenent
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convenient
confinement
 to us to meet and take to others.
Initially
, people
chat
 by text online, and now we can even
chat
 in voice and
vedio
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video
do
videos
. Not like an offline meeting or date,
which
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 we need to set up a schedule, and go somewhere to meet in person, in
online
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an online
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chat
roome
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rooms
, we can jump into a channel very easily and start a conversation. And
moreover
, most
chat
room
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 are organized by topics, so people could find and discuss something they are both interested in, and
therefore
 more likely to build a friendship. So from
this
 term, online
chat
room
 has unbeaten advancement.
On the other hand
, making friends from
chat
room
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also
 has some problems that we need to be aware of, especially when they want to move their relationship one step closer, like meet offline. One major problem is you don't know anything else other than what your
chat
 friend told you, and maybe what you've heard are lies, and you won't find that out
untill
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until
 it is too later.
That is
 because you don't share a common social network with each other so it is difficult to tell who he really is in real life.
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