Some people work for the same organisation all their working life other think that it is better to work for different organisation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

People
are doing
work
to complete their essential needs
such
as shelter and clothes, food. Most
people
prefer to do
work
in the same place in their whole life
however
, individuals think that that it is a good idea to change the
organisation
workplace. In
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will discuss both aspects and I give you my opinion in the coming paragraphs. On the one hand,
people
are interested in doing
work
in the same
organisation
in their entire life because there are many reasons.
Firstly
, they are want to get
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promotion if they are working in the same place and
also
they are getting more experience from the same
organisation
.
secondly
, working in the same spot is good for socialism.
For instance
,
people
are doing
work
for a long time in
same
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company so all team members live as a part of family and
friendsAs
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friends
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a result we can
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a good relations
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good relations
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with colleagues and share feelings and thoughts.
On the other hand
,individuals think that it is
good
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chance to learn something new if we have change
organisation
due to they are following
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routine and can
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boredom.To illustrate,They
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to
different
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a different
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organisation
which can
be give
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excitement and
enthuisam
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enthusiasm
so that could
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great performance and would
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excellent result
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is that if we can change job we can start
work
in
new
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way and it helps to eliminate all mistakes that we can do in
previous
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company and
also
we can show best qualities and skill for that job. In conclusion, individuals think that its best decision to choose working in
different
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organisation
rather than the doing
work
in
same
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organisation
.I
believes
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that changing a company
give
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to
new
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way of thinking.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stability
  • loyalty
  • familiarity
  • upward movement
  • sense of community
  • job security
  • diverse experiences
  • flexibility
  • acquisition
  • broad range
  • exposure
  • industries
  • practices
  • cultures
  • fostering
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • professional network
  • compelling case
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