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Nowadays families are not as close as they used to be what do you think are the causes of this? What can be done to make families closer

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 a majority of people spend
time
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 at
home
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 with their family during the pandemic, they are not likely to start a conversation with them. While there are those people who believe that families are no longer close as they used to be, they are trying to find a solution to figure
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 out. The following paragraph will discuss what are the causes of
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 issue and how to fix it.
To begin
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 with, most people work at
home
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 nowadays,
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 when they spend
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 at
home
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 to work, it might cause unbalancing of work-life. According to my experience,
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,when I studied at
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 sone early to the evening, I would like to relax and spend my
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 with my hobbies.
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,
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 might cause
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 problem because I only take
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 with myself without having a conversation with family.
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 has bolstered the instance that fatigue from doing something might cause a problem in the relationship. In my opinion, a lot of families is struggling with
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 problem because they have no idea how to solve it. In my opinion, what I suggest is they just spend
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 together- have dinner together or spend
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 during the weekend. When they gathering together, no matter what it is, I believe that their relationship will come closer.
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, there are many ways to make them closer because there is no shortcut to deal with it. The relationship in a family is sensitive, so members in the family should use the right way to fix it
otherwise
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, it would be drawbacks.
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