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Some people say that having a lot of TV channels is good, while others argue that it reduces the quality of programs. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #tv #channels #quality #programs
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Some
people
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 say that have many
TV
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channels
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 is the best way to find an interesting
program
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, while others
people
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 disagree with
this
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 because
lack
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 of quality
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program
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programs
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 that
people
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 have more than two
channels
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 to choose
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this
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 may have
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an effect
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 on
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the producer
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producer
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producers
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 that cannot maintain qualities of
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program
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the program
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. Both of
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this view
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 will be outlined in
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 before the conclusion is reached. It
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apparent
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 that having various
type
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types
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 of
TV
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channels
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 can make
people
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 find any
programs
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 to watch, whether documentary, reality show, soap opera, romantic comedy,
sci fi
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 or action.
People
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 who boring with some
TV
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channels
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 can change their mind to watch other
channels
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such
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student
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students
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 feel that educational
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program
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programs
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 did not attract them anymore, so they can switch to watch what they want by remote control.
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, adults who think news or soap opera is very boring, they can
looking
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be looking
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 for some new amazing
program
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 namely Netflix which have
many
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any
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sort
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sorts
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 of movies including
sci fi
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, action movie or reality show. These
platform
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platforms
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 let
people
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 feel more enjoyable and relax.
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, having many
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channels
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 can be
disadvantage
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a disadvantage
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 for producers. The reason is some
TV
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programs
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 have low average ratings that make producer feels less confident and motivation. To enumerate,
programs
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 are affected from lack of motivation, so that lead to
drop
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 of
program
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 quality
in particular
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 producers often make mistake and did not check the details, they
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 up,
also
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 think
people
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 can find
other
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another program
other programs
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program
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 to watch and there are lots of
program
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 with the same content and more popular.
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, because of
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 reason, it
make
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 watchers change their attitude with
TV
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programs
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 and find
new
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a new
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 one that more valuable. To summarize, it is good to have many
channels
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 on television because can choose various
type
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types
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 of
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program
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programs
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 to watch but every
producers
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producer
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 and station must maintain their quality and keep developing their content every
years
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year
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.
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