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Governments should make more effort to promote alternative sources of energy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is undeniable fact that source of
energy
 is improved their work efficiency and become more energetic in a whole day. There are different things to government should take steps for making sources of
energy
products
.I strongly disagree with
this
 statement because
energy
products
 need to be organic rather than artificial flavours.
To begin
 with,why the government should not need to take steps to produce sources of
energy
products
 there are enormous reasons.
First
 of all,
energy
products
 are many detrimental effects on our health because
energy
products
 would be made with some chemicals or artificial flavours.
As a result
,
this
 can be a cause serious diseases
such
 as cancer or kidney failure and may be paralyzed Along with
this
 all
products
 are made for only taste but do not have some healthy proteins.
In addition
 to
this
, they all flavours maybe have become addicted and
also
 they want to eat only artificial flavour.
However
,if they denied all artificial
products
 it helps to enhance the demand for organic food
instead
 of other
energy
products
.
This
 can be made more opportunities for the formers and
also
 it improves economical growth.To illustrate,they are really want to consume pure
products
such
 as milk and other food
products
.
Thus
,they do not want to intake powder milk because all dairy
products
 are made by some chemicals or artificial
products
. In conclusion, the government should focus on organic sources of
energy
products
instead
 of artificial ones due to
their
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 create opportunities for the former and young generations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spearheading
  • sustainable
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • transitioning
  • economic implications
  • government policies
  • research and development
  • national energy security
  • public-private sector collaboration
  • diversifying
  • environmental impact
  • clean energy
  • industry growth
  • dependence on imported fuels
  • alternative sources
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