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In the past, knowledge was contained in books. Nowadays, knowledge is uploaded to the internet. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#books #internet #outweigh
Some beneficial
informations
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information
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was
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 stored in
books
 before the
21th
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 century.Currently, with the recent technological advancements paper treasures is available
in
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on
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 the
Internet
.Actually,
this
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advantages
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 and disadvantages of online reading. Work with the
computer
have
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 their own benefits.
First
 of all,it should
to
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talk about the availability of any
information
.
Internet-is
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reliable
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 source,if it
have
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 quite rare or unknown
information
. Since
information
 is abundant and there is no
storage
 issue, unlike conventional
books
,
this
 eliminates
enermous
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enormous
 costs.
Secondly
,as previously said,
storage
in
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internet
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the internet
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is not costs
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does not cost
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 any money.But it can be
expections
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expectations
 for
this
 option,and
storage
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the
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 large volume of
information
 can requires some money.But it
supposed
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 that it is the better option with comparison to
memorise
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 all of the
information
.
Thirdly
,if
information
are
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valueable
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valuable
 or expensive,
Internet
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the Internet
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 is reliable
storage
 to preserve.Intending to collect
the
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many different
information
,
Internet
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 is
suitable
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 option for
this
 aspect.
In addition
, the
Internet
 is an easily accessible resource accessible from anywhere in the world. To access it, you do not need to make a request to a specific library or store. For these reasons, it is easy to verify that
information
 stored on the
Internet
 is a cheaper and more efficient way compared to
books
. But,some people believe that the knowledge contained in
books
 is less risky than
the
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Internet
. With the development of technology, there is always a fear of technical failures or
cyber attacks
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cyber-attacks
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.Without antivirus,
computer
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a computer
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 able to
cordinally
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cordially
ordinarily
cardinally
 destroyed.And with the
computer
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 it can be lost some of
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valuable
valueable
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the valueable
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information
. To sum up, the obvious fact is that the
Internet
 has revolutionized the way we do many things around us, including storing
information
.But you should not forget the safety of your
computer
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning
  • Virtual libraries
  • Cyberspace
  • Search engine literacy
  • Critical evaluation skills
  • Open-source information
  • Data mining
  • Intellectual property
  • Digital preservation
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