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Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems people should be encouraged to live in cities rather than in suburbs or in the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
 argue that traffic congestion and commutation issues can be mitigated by letting more
people
 settle in the central part of cities
instead
 of residing elsewhere. I completely agree with
this
 statement because it will cut down travel time for many and
people
in
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downtown will get benefitted too.
To begin
, if more
people
 start living near their workplaces, which are usually in the mid of cities,
then
 commuters can either walk to work or even use
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a bicycle
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bicycle
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 to attend office.
This
 can substantially reduce the traffic on usual busy roads as
number
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 of vehicles on the roads will be lesser.
Also
,
this
 will enable
people
 to spend more time with family or leisure since they will have more time in hand. A recent experiment done in Tokyo city revealed that if more
people
 start living in the heart of town,
then
 traffic congestion can be reduced by
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 47%.
Furthermore
, if more
people
 will start living in mid of cities
then
 even those companies which are
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public transportation
  • traffic congestion
  • private vehicles
  • urban areas
  • long commutes
  • population density
  • sustainable transportation
  • efficient transportation options
  • cycling lanes
  • pedestrian pathways
  • advanced transit systems
  • overcrowding
  • transportation infrastructure
  • urban development
  • pollution
  • quality of life
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