Scientists believe that the world is in danger due to environmental changes. Some people say that personal lifestyle changes should be made to reduce the damage to environment, while others think that the government should do something to help. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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environment
envirnment
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has
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largely affected the globe. Certain
people
beleive
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believe
that
this
problem could be lessened by altering the
people
's living standard,
however
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others argue that proper steps need to be taken by the authority. In
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essay,
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will describe both views and explain my support for the latter view. On the one hand, there are
pople
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people
who advocate that the barrier in
atmosphare
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atmosphere
is harming the global ecology, so it is human responsibility to fight for
this
situation.
This
is due to
increased
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luxurious lifestyle of mankind and
debrish
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debris
stored in different places. If
people
are aware of the effect of
this
condition, it can be minimized.
For example
, an increase in
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of gas
motorvehicle
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motor vehicle
,
deforastation
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deforestation
,and farming all these human action has added pollution in
environment
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which
altimatly
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ultimately
harming back to
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cosmopolitan
.
On the other hand
,
i
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believe
this
affair should be taken care
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the administration because it is rooted not only
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individual
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level
but
also
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rules and regulations
level
that was issued by the federal.
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is not
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for maintaining global warming .
Furthermore
, the government can motivate and encourage
scientist
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scientists
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to research and find the appropriate solutions.
Likewies
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Likewise
,
this
issue should be eradicated by developing different types of technologies
such
as battery
car
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cars
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instead
of
gas
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a gas
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vehicle
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vehicles
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.
For instance
, tesla car. Alternatively, if
this
matter is not
sloved
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solved
resolved
in the national
level
it could get
wrose
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worse
and the high
level
of pollution surrounding will hamper all the
creaters
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creators
creatures
. In
conslusion
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conclusion
,
although
many
people
are advocating to live differently so we can fight for environmental barriers, which
results
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a big problem in our planet, in my opinion, it is necessary to pass certain
law
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and take innovative steps towards inventing technologies.
This
will
definately
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definitely
help to overcome
such
issues and save the earth.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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