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In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Elderly people are to be taken
care
 of,
this
 could be the duty of the
children
 by virtue and obligation. They end up at
Care
 Centers or Old Age homes when they are felt
as
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 a burden to the
children
 or to the Society from a
government
's point of
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. A nurse at
such
 a place can provide the required medical
care
. In
this
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 I will provide my thoughts on the matter with relevant examples. It is the duty of the
Children
 to provide adequate
care
 for their parents who took
care
 of them when they were born into
this
 world. Families are forced to put up their parents in
care
centers
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 because
,
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 they are not able to provide the attention. To elucidate, the son or daughter who's the only sibling in a family may be
commited
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committed
 to their
responsibilites
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responsibilities
 to their spouses and kids and cannot find the time and financial resources to provide appropriate time and
care
. If the family cannot provide
the
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adequate resources the senior citizen should be put up in homes and do the
neeful
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needful
useful
. A
government
 should only take
care
 of the
destitutes
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destitute
 abandoned by the
children
, by providing incentives and tax benefits to
such
 organisations
who
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 shelter
such
 personnel. A good example would be Nepal where the
government
 helps find
abode
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 for them where the
Government
 educates the young to take
care
 of the elders and
also
 provide discounts on medicines and consultations as a Senior Citizen discount. To Summarise, I feel that it is a moral obligation of the child to take
care
 of his guardians and if he cannot provide the needful. They should
accomodate
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accommodate
 their parents at
such
centers
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 so that they stay at a place where there are
like minded
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 people and the
government
 could provide benefits to either
parties
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 who are willing to shoulder the burden.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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