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E-mail has had a huge impact on professional and social communication, but this impact has been negative as well as positive. Do the advantages of using e-mail outweigh the disadvantages?

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Currently,
e-mail
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 communication has altered professional and social types of negotiation.
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, there are some dark sides as well.
This
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 essay is going to consider both sides of using
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. On the one hand in
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 work process seems to be difficult and
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e-mail
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the e-mail
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system
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 in
this
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 case is demonstrating usefulness. By using
e-mail
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 in many job areas and offices people already
keeps
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the
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time-management. Utilizing
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 innovation, people could save more time, save an amount of data online, and leaved
paper based
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paper-based
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system
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systems
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 back. As an
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 it is true to emphasize GOOGLE and Microsoft companies` online
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system
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systems
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. All employees and their managers negotiate and communicate with each other by mail messages. According to their
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 it is more contemporary and efficient to accomplish co-working and team-building by
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.
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, even if
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 innovative
system
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 brought an abundance of merits,
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 we are seeing its drawbacks. The dominant factor to explain is internet viruses. Basically, online mail services like
e-mail
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 are weakly secured from external attacks, especially from cooking and virus files. Consuming these services is making
risk
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 of losing our valuable data even using these data against us.
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, in
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the Philippines
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 credit managers of their national bank used to rely on
e-mail
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system
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systems
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 to
agreeing
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 bank operations,
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result
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 after
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some time
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sometime
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 their bank operations showed
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an error
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error
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errors
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 and
a
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plenty of money and
crypto currency
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cryptocurrency
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 have been stolen by hackers.
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Second
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 big factor is that
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also
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 increases workload in
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the job
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, and it will bring stress and other unpleasant impressions on workers. To sum up, we have considered that
e-mail
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 is assisting us to keep the time, but
also
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this
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 contemporary service
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sometimes
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 making issues connected with virus attacks and other objections. We see that
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the disadvantages
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 is outweighing
benefits
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the benefits
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 in
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 case.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication
  • professional
  • social interaction
  • efficiency
  • long-distance
  • information exchange
  • organization
  • distraction
  • miscommunication
  • non-verbal cues
  • escalation
  • interpersonal skills
  • reliance
  • personal relationships
  • digital landscape
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