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Some think the current generation should take steps to protect the environment for the next generation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Few environmentalists believe that it is
present
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generation
 responsibility to save
environment
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the environment
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 for
next
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the next
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generation
.
Environment
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The environment
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 has become
greatest
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the greatest
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 concern for scientists. In my opinion, I
am totally agree
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 with the given notion. In
this
 essay, I will describe what are the problems
people
 are facing and how it can be beneficial for other
generation
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generations
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 if societies start taking initiation. It is evident that
,
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environment
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the environment
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 is the biggest problem for
universe
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the universe
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 because
advancement
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the advancement
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 of automobile sectors, industries, deforestation.
Consequently
, humans and animals are at the greatest risk.
Extinction
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 of animals
are
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 increasing rapidly due to cutting trees and hunting.
Vast
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 majority of industrial’s waste is thrown in the sea.
Therefore
, it is harmful
for
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 water animals.
Additionally
,
they
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the
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 emission gas and fuel that are hazardous for individuals’ health. Apart from all the reasons mentioned above, it is
people
responsibility
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respond
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 to protect
environment
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the environment
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 because it is
need
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a need
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of
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for
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 an hour. It can not be done alone. Each and every individual should priorities their work related to
save
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saving
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the eco
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eco system
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ecosystem
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. To control automobile pollution,
people
 can use public transport.
For instance
, many
people
 keep on their vehicle’s engine on the at
level
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a level
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 crossing and the signals.
As a result
, it increases air pollution that has an adverse effect on health. If we start from today, it affects
future
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the future
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. Like that most humans should plant trees, stop using unnecessary plastics. Waste recycling is the best process for wet and dry products. Endangered species should be saved by society and governments.
Furthermore
, for better life of
next
generation
, it should start working at present neither they will suffer
health related
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 problems.
Moreover
,
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the eco
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eco system
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ecosystem
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 will be
imbalance
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imbalanced
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 which will have
detrimental
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a detrimental
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 effect on living beings. No one wants to see that their children suffer due to present living being’s fault. In conclusion, few
people
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think
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thing
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think
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 that
people
 should protect
environment
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the environment
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 for
upcoming
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the upcoming
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generation
 because it is vital. I have discussed the problems related to
excess
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 use of vehicles,
trees
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tree
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 cutting, industrial waste. I totally feel that it is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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 of every human being if they
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towant
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want
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won't
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 see happy
to
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with
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 their
off springs
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offsprings
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.
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