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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Listening to
music
 has always been an enjoyable activity for
people
 from all walks of life. No matter how old or of what social status you are, you are likely to spend a couple of minutes listening to
music
 every single day. The question here is whether
this
 can improve our relationship with other
people
 or not.
People
 listen to
music
 in many situations. Sometimes you listen to
music
 alone while you are driving on a road, and sometimes while you are enjoying your solitude. In
such
 cases, in my opinion, there is no
chance
 of meeting or getting to know
people
 from different cultures or ages; you can just enjoy the sole presentation of the
music
: lyrics, rhythm and
the
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melody. Keep in mind that if the lyrics
is
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 written
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in
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is
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 an unfamiliar foreign language,
then
 you will even miss the benefit of understanding the meaning. In
this
situation
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 there is even less
chance
 to perceive the culture and have an
imagination
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 of new
people
. There are other times that you prefer to enjoy
music
 by sharing it with other
people
.
For
example
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 many
people
 are into spending their leisure time at bars or cafes where different
musics
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kinds of music
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 are constantly being played.
Such
 public places provide us with a better
chance
 to meet
people
 from different cultures or ages.
Moreover
, you might even have the
chance
 to dance, talk and interact with various
people
 if you are sociable enough. On top of
this
, nowadays
musics
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music
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 are mainly presented with video clips which enables you to become familiar with
people
 from different origins by watching how they present their country or culture; like seeing their costume and dance. All in all, listening to
music
 is
such
 an enjoyable and popular activity around the world. The public might do it in their solitude or share its pleasure with others. I believe that the way in which
music
 can bring
people
 together is highly influenced by the situation at which they prefer to listen to it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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