Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Working in firms for finely paid and having prosperous
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. Professional
life
is an important part of our lives and everyone must experience it
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any case of the social and educational backgrounds. There are
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whether
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wether
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whether
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a person should work in the same organisation until she/he retires or should change her/his
job
as needed. Both
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of view will be critiqued before reaching
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a logical conclusion. On the one
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there are individual groups who enjoy
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their
job
and
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towards
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company
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. Their company or organisation provides
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stability and
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of security.
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, government jobs
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thier
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their
employees
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comfortable working environment , salary is enough to support the
life
and the person feels
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with the
job
scope , so they rarely want to change their
job
.
On the other hand
, working at different agencies increase
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of
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and promotions. Which
also
enhances the standard of living.
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software development experts can work in different large software companies , as per their programming skills. They have many different platforms to work on , so altering the companies
benifits
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benefits
benefit
them in future. They have diverse
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of experience after switching business so long and it will reflect as a good way for personal & professional
life
. In my opinion, If the
job
offers
job
satisfaction and the person feels secure at the organisation for working over there, there is no reason for him /her to change
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their
working platform. Even it is
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of
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process.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stability
  • loyalty
  • seniority
  • job satisfaction
  • rapidly changing job market
  • adapt to
  • work culture
  • career progression
  • network
  • diversity of experience
  • adaptability
  • career aspirations
  • dynamic nature
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