Today many children spend a lot of time playing computer games and less time on sports. Why ? Is it a positive or a negative development ?

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Today's era is known as a technological era. Nowadays people like to use the latest technology and gadgets. In

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outdoor physical activities

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as sports

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less popular and today's kids spend most of their

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playing

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games

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and in other indoor activities. there are some

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behind the popularity of outdoor sports are fallen down.

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negative

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. The reason behind spending more

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on computers and why

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will be discussed adequately in the following paragraphs. To commence with, the

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behind more usage of computers. The

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and foremost cause is an advertisement of

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and live streaming of online

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. To explain it, youngsters can see the frequent advertisement of online

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on television which attracts them because of rewards and gifts. The live streaming of online

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by famous gamers is another reason for more popularity of

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, some famous game players show their skills on youtube by live broadcasting that attracts youth to spend their

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online activity

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of physical activity.

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is considered as a negative

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because of less

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spending on sports activities. More

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in front of gadgets leads to

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mind and

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mindset.

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, a good growth of

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depends on physical exercise. If children have not spent more

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the playground

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they do not develop physical skills and

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the growth of the brain is affected.

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, another bad point of usage of electronic items is

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the emission

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of radiation from electric items.

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very harmful to our organs of the

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and mainly eyes are badly affected due to high usage of internet devices. To conclude,

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advertisement and live broadcasting are the main

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behind

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. Effects on

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parts and radiation emission are the

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is surely considered as a negative

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