Today many children spend a lot of time playing computer games and less time on sports. Why ? Is it a positive or a negative development ?

Today's era is known as a technological era. Nowadays people like to use the latest technology and gadgets. In
this
generation
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outdoor physical activities
such
as sports
become
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less popular and today's kids spend most of their
time
in
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playing
computer
games
and in other indoor activities. there are some
reasons
behind the popularity of outdoor sports are fallen down.
This
development
is considered
as
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a
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negative
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a negative
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development
. The reason behind spending more
time
on computers and why
this
development
is
consider
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as
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negative
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a negative
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development
, both
these
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will be discussed adequately in the following paragraphs. To commence with, the
reasons
behind more usage of computers. The
first
and foremost cause is an advertisement of
computer
games
and live streaming of online
games
. To explain it, youngsters can see the frequent advertisement of online
computer
games
on television which attracts them because of rewards and gifts. The live streaming of online
games
by famous gamers is another reason for more popularity of
computer
games
.
For example
, some famous game players show their skills on youtube by live broadcasting that attracts youth to spend their
time
on
the
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online activity
instead
of physical activity.
This
development
is considered as a negative
development
because of less
time
spending on sports activities. More
time
in front of gadgets leads to
underdeveloped
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mind and
narrow
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a narrow
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mindset.
secondly
, a good growth of
body
depends on physical exercise. If children have not spent more
time
on
theplayground
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the playground
then
they do not develop physical skills and
also
the growth of the brain is affected.
In addition
, another bad point of usage of electronic items is
emission
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the emission
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of radiation from electric items.
That is
very harmful to our organs of the
body
and mainly eyes are badly affected due to high usage of internet devices. To conclude,
an
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advertisement and live broadcasting are the main
reasons
behind
this
development
. Effects on
body
and
body
parts and radiation emission are the
reasons
which indicate that
the
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this
development
is surely considered as a negative
development
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allure
  • captivate
  • supervise
  • accessible
  • scarcity
  • safer alternative
  • peer pressure
  • educational tools
  • cognitive skills
  • implications
  • obesity
  • poor posture
  • hand-eye coordination
  • problem-solving abilities
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