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n today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents' absence. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#n #world #families #parents #work #say #children #benefit #income #lack #support #absence
In the present
aggresive
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aggressive
 environment most parents feel that it is essential for both
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partners to work. It is considered by some that
off springs
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 in these
socieities
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societies
 get the advantage of extra income, while there are others who think that many
children
 do not get
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support from their family. In
this
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 I will look at both sides of the
arguments
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argument
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 and give my opinion. On the one hand, more financial resources can provide
better
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future
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young minds. It is a
well- known
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 fact that money plays a vital role in the
developlment
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development
redevelopment
 of the bright
future
 of the
children
 especially in
this
 era of inflation in the developing economies as more money can open oceans of opportunities for people and they can enhance their knowledge and skills by means of quality education and resources.
For instance
, infants in developed countries are
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 and highly qualified due to the fact that their parents
posess
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possess
 high
income
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incomes
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. In short,
families
 having sound economic
position
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positions
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 are in a much better position to give their
children
 a good
future
.
On the other hand
,
upbringing
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 of a child is
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affected
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effected
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affected
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 due to
lack
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a lack
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 of family support. Undoubtedly youngsters of wealthy
families
 do not excel in academics and sports during
thier
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their
 school days as
children
 in these communities are left with no assistance from their elders as
families
 find it difficult to focus on their
children
 due to
lack
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 of time management. To illustrate, people born in rich
families
 often have poor education
background
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 due to which they are compelled to take a medium level of occupation in the
future
.
Finally
, in my
opinion
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 Money is an integral part of human life and it is necessary for survival and growth
however
 earning wealth should not compromise the
future
 of
children
 and it is the responsibility of parents to take good care of
thier
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their
 babies.
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