Some people believe that there should be a gap year after finishing high school (secondary school) and before starting university. To what extend you agree or disagree?

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It is thought by some people that a

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year long

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break is necessary

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high

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and prior to the beginning of university

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. I strongly agree that there should be a

gap

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so that the

kids

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could relax a little,

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, it

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mot

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as long as one

year

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. On completion of high

school

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, it would be better if

students

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could get a break as some

students

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work very hard during their time in high

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to secure a position

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reputed universities. For some of the secondary

educational

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exams are very competitive and

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put

kids

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under a lot of pressure, a longer vacation would give them enough time to relax and enjoy various recreational activities.

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to that, some

students

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would prefer working part-time jobs in order to get

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hands on

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experience in the

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they have opted for as well as to save some money for their university

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. A proper

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would

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ensure them enough time to plan and prepare for their

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level

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life

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gap

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is necessary, one

year

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would be too long for a break.

Kids

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would find it difficult to go back into their routine

life

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of studies. They might feel lazy to start studying again after a period of relaxation.

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, it is very difficult to get children to study even after a short summer break.

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longer

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the

gap

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greater

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would be the

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in the concepts they studied in high

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. It might get difficult for

students

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to recollect what they studied in

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. So a

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of 6-7 months would

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appropriate before starting the

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level

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of education. In conclusion, a vacation is necessary after

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secondary

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education. Yet that does not mean it has to be as long as 1

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, it could be shortened for few months because it will be difficult for

kids

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to cope with the tertiary education

level

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Some people believe that there should be a gap year after finishing high school (secondary school) and before starting university. To what extend you agree or disagree?

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today, many people do nt know their neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause, and solve?

Some people say the professional workers such as, doctors, nurses and teachers, who make greater contribution to the society, should be paid more than those people in the field of sports and entertainment. To what extent do you agree and disagree?.

Some people claim that it is acceptance to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while others argue that it is wrong. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some belief that money for education should mainly be spent on better computers while others believe it would be better spent on teachers.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people prefer to spend most of their time with friends. Other people prefer to be alone most of the time. Which way of life do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support your answer.