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Students at schools and universities learn far more from lessons with teachers than from others sources (such as the internet, television). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is commonly believed that children at higher institutions gain more
knowledge
 while learning from their professors as compared to learning from online sources. I agree with the given statement and there are two reasons why I think so and they will be explained in the
next
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To begin
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workbooks
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work books
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 are
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 source of
theoritical
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theoretical
knowledge
. It is a
well known
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 fact that publications are primarily based on theory concepts when
tought
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taught
thought
 to students in the classrooms and people pay more attention to
such
 ideas and opinions.
For instance
, listening to scientific inventions and early discoveries prompt people to think out of the box. In short, teachers play a
vitol
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vital
 role in teaching theories and conceptual
knowledge
.
Secondly
, online learning is not effective. Undoubtedly, communities taking online classes struggle to understand important concepts due to
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 communication.
Although
 technology is an important part of the modern era many people still find it
diffuicult
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difficult
 to use technology and
as a
result
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 they start
loosing
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interst
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interest
 in academics. To illustrate, many
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school-going
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school
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 going children show no interest in online learning due to poor
knowledge
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 technological gadgets.
Therefore
,
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 of radio and television do can not be considered a good source of education. In conclusion, I strongly affirm that
although
 offline learning is
time consuming
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 and requires more
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 it is certainly an effective way to teach
masses
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the masses
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 effectively.
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