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Apartment buildings are the preferred living space for many people. But many individuals prefer living in a house. Which do you prefer? Explain your thoughts using examples.”

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A lot of
people
 prefer to live in apartments for many different reasons,
however
, many families choose to live in a
house
. For me, I personally prefer living in an
apartment
 for two main reasons; they are more affordable and
apartment
 living can help strengthen the family’s relationship/ bond. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate on my reasons.
To begin
 with,
house
 prices are normally much higher than apartments and they are more expensive to maintain. Taiwan is a densely populated country and the average person’s income is not very high. For
this
 reason, it is not affordable for many
people
 to buy or maintain a private
house
. In my situation, My
apartment
 is spacious, affordable, well-located and the building has many communal facilities included in the price,
such
 as a gym, a swimming pool, a meeting room, and a movie
theater
Change the spelling
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 to name a few.
Furthermore
, living in an
apartment
 can help to improve a family’s bond. Living in a flat gives
people
 the opportunity to see each other more often and spend more
time
 together.
In contrast
, living in a
house
, family members have more space which can create distance and sometimes weaken relationships as members may choose to spend their
time
 in their rooms or on a different floor to the others. I remember when I was a child, my brother and I spent our
time
 playing together upstairs while our parents spent their
time
 downstairs watching television.
This
 created a distance between us as our free
time
 activities were more individual and not collective. Nowadays, I live in an
apartment
 with my family and we are much closer and share our activities. In conclusion,
although
 many
people
 prefer living in a
house
, I feel that there are many more benefits to living in an
apartment
 namely the affordability, the facilities and the shared activities with family.
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Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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