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The older generations have very traditional ideas about the correct ways of life, thinking and behaviour. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful for the younger generations to prepare for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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The plans of the Islip town centre have been demonstrated by the given infographics representations. Overall, it is clearly visible that the picturesque presentations have displayed distinct transformations of several aspects in the future layout as
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 to the present scenario. Currently,
this
 tiny town diagram is consist of a school building in the extreme southwest corner along with a humongous residential area in the middle, a park in the eastern direction, multiple shops in the upper section, which are divided by the main road near
countryside
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. According to the proposed future blueprint, there will be a few changes in the location. At
first
, the improvement of
transport
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 system can be seen, which is covering the entire site in a circular manner, extending towards east and west section horizontally. Two new housing complexes will be constructed together with
existing
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 one, mostly in the eastward direction. The size of the park has been enlarged;
however
,
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 will remain
same
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. Construction can
also
 be seen for the educational institution
also
, without changing its site. There is a new inclusion of
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 carriageway behind the school. In the countryside, a bus station, a car park and a shopping centre in between them will be built up. The main road will be transformed into
pedestrian’s
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 pathway; while,
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lower
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 section of the numerous shops will be consistent.
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