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Nowadays there is an increase in people with an unhealthy diet and not doing enough physical exercises. What do you think might be the reason? What can be done to encourage people to have a healthier lifestyle?

#people #diet #exercises #reason #lifestyle
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 there is a steady growth in
an
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 amount of
people
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 becoming obese and the lack of physical fitness.
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such
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 as high-priced of healthy
foods
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 and
gym
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 membership and it will be constructed TV shows which constitute
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the cooking
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 of healthy
foods
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 problem. There are
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 of
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 and fitness clubs for developing
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a healthy
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lifestyle
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people
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foods
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for
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gym
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 are very expensive.
People
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 eat
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unhealthy
food
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 due to their insufficient time, health unawareness and cost, the
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food
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are
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 cheap than good
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. In meantime, in
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 clubs,
people
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 have to pay even more money for the
gym
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 and for the trainer.
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experience
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 my friend
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healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle
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 and he
spend
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 three times more money
for
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on
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food
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 and
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gym
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the gym
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 than others.
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 proves that in our city a healthy
lifestyle
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 costs a lot of money. The possible solution for
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 problem is
a
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making TV
shows
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 about
cooking
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the cooking
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of
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apply
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healthy
foods
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 at home.
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people
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 cook
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foods
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 for their family thanks to culinary TV programs which consider ways of cooking
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various
type
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types
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 of
foods
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. It is necessary to increase the number of cooking shows that teach
people
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 how to cook healthy
food
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 at home, both good and cheap.
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, there is a program "Eat and lose weight!" on the TNT channel where the host of the show calls on a professional chef and a nutritionist for help, and they come up with how to make a cutlet or a chocolate cake from a very high-calorie to cutlet or a chocolate cake, but half the calories. To conclude, in
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 modern world the number of
people
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 who have an unhealthy
lifestyle
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 increase suddenly day by day, because high-cost of the good
foods
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 and
gym
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 membership. The possible solution for
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 is
increase
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to increase
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 the
quantity
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number
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 of television shows for cooking healthy
foods
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.
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