Nowadays there is an increase in people with an unhealthy diet and not doing enough physical exercises. What do you think might be the reason? What can be done to encourage people to have a healthier lifestyle?

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there is a steady growth in
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amount of
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of healthy
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and fitness clubs for developing
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lifestyle
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gym
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are very expensive.
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unhealthy
food
due to their insufficient time, health unawareness and cost, the
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food
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cheap than good
foods
. In meantime, in
gym
clubs,
people
have to pay even more money for the
gym
and for the trainer.
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experience
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my friend
prefer
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healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle
and he
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three times more money
for
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food
and
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the gym
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than others.
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proves that in our city a healthy
lifestyle
costs a lot of money. The possible solution for
this
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making TV
shows
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about
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the cooking
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healthy
foods
at home.
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people
cook
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foods
for their family thanks to culinary TV programs which consider ways of cooking
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various
type
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of
foods
. It is necessary to increase the number of cooking shows that teach
people
how to cook healthy
food
at home, both good and cheap.
For instance
, there is a program "Eat and lose weight!" on the TNT channel where the host of the show calls on a professional chef and a nutritionist for help, and they come up with how to make a cutlet or a chocolate cake from a very high-calorie to cutlet or a chocolate cake, but half the calories. To conclude, in
this
modern world the number of
people
who have an unhealthy
lifestyle
increase suddenly day by day, because high-cost of the good
foods
and
gym
membership. The possible solution for
this
is
increase
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the
quantity
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number
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of television shows for cooking healthy
foods
.
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