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Some people say that watching TV programmes and movies related to crime are popular. Why do you think it’s popular and how does it affect society?

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Nowadays, criminal TV series are getting popular. Hundreds of movies and series, that are related to crimes, have been producing every year. I tend to think that it is only because people like to watch interesting stories and it brings awareness to them.
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 watching dramas more than other genres. There is
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plenty of legends and facts in history about popular
culpits
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 and some of them are famous in mass culture.
For instance
, Al Capone, Richard Ramirez, Henry Howard Holmes. Their biography is like
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detective
novels
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In addition
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 like An American crime, Legend, Bronson, Peaky Blinders and others.
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, it has a positive impact on society because it informs us about various numerous wrongdoings.
For example
,
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 Bad series shows us the evil of drugs and how dangerous is to be related to drug dealers, Escobar tells us about kidnapping, murders and homicides to inform us.
Last
 but not least, they teach us how to avoid
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 of troubles and perpetrators. The point I am trying to make is that crime movies and TV shows are not as bad as they are said to be. They are just entertainment tools. And sometimes they can teach us to the different important things.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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