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The diagram explains the way in which
sugar
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 is produced from
sugar
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canes
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. Overall, the process has 7 stages, beginning with growing
sugar
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canes
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, ending with drying and cooling processes.
First
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 of all,
sugar
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canes
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 are planted and looked after for 12 to 18 months.
Then
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,
sugar
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canes
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 are harvested by the farmer used a sharp melee or a huge tractor.
Next
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, the farmer transfers
sugar
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canes
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 into the crushing machine and sweet
juice
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 comes out from the
sugar
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canes
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. In the
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 stages,
sugar
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 cane
juice
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 proceeds to a funnel that has a limestone filter. After
juice
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 goes through the filter, it will be pure
juice
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 without contaminated contents.
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, pure
juice
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 is put in the evaporator where it can generate heat and
juice
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 becomes syrup. After that, the syrup is centrifuged for separating crystals from them. Eventually,
sugar
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 is kept in a metal container for drying and cooling.
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