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The news media have too much influence on peoples lives today and this is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#news #media #influence #peoples #lives #development
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In
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today's
today
todays
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 era, advanced technology
have
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 too much effect on
individuals
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 life and it has nega influences.
Although
, mass
media
 update
people
 with every
news
, yet drawbacks cannot be ignored
such
 as increasing violence. On.the one side, there
are
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 numerous advantage of social
media
 are more considerable.
Firstly
, it helps to keep up to date
peoole
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people
 with different
news
 about
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their
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 surroundings and
also
 about globes
news
. Due to
media
, not
people
 becoming more concerned about their safety, but
also
 taking
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adequate measures. To justify it, the Theme study
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 has been shown that
people
 came to know about
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the corona
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corona virus
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coronavirus
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 through
news
 channels, even they
also
 learned about precautions through it.
Secondly
,
media
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the media
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 through light on the social issues, like discrimination and increasing crime rate, which gives a direct message to the government that they need to tackle the problem. On the
others
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 side, there are
also
 some negative influences of
media
 on
the
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society. Primarily,
media
 always displays the
crime related
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news
 more than it occurred to get popularity among
masses
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the masses
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, which tends to
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increase the stress level of the
people
,
people
 avoid
to come
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 out of their
home
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homes
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 and do not maintain good relationships with their
neighbors
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,because they
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loose
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 their trust on others. Secondarily, nowadays
media
 focus on advertising confidential material which leaves negative impacts on the children.
In addition
 to
this
,
media
interfare
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interfere
interface
 in
personal
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 life of the celebrities, which make them embarrassed in front of their fans. To conclude, while
media
 making
people
 more aware
about
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 their surroundings;
however
, drawbacks are undeniable, which increasing the worries of the
people
.
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