Some people think employers should not care about the way their employees dress, but the quality at work. To what extent you agree or disagree?

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Every government

Employees

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has a different

dress

code which is decided by government authority. some people

belive

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believe

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that

employers

should not worry about what employee should wear and focus on their productive

work

while

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other

opine

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that it is necessary to wear a decent

dress

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the work

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work place

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workplace

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which is decided by their

employers

.I firmly believe in

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the later

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later

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latter

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view. There are many reasons to wear a

perticular

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particular

type of cloth at

job

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the job

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place.

Firstly

,When we maintain

dress

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code, It shows respect to our

job

Secondly

, When every employee

wear

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wears

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uniform

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a uniform

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it shows

decipline

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discipline

work

Finally

, By wearing

uniform

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a uniform

the uniform

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, people can easily recognize your

job

profession. To illustrate, We can identify polices , doctors, lawyers and

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firefighters

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fire fighters

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firefighters

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by their

uniform

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uniforms

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anywhere in

world

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the world

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However

,If

employers

don't have any

uniform

guidline

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guideline

for their firm, employees will wear whatever they want. Most people will understand that what type of

dress

is fit for

job

while, some will not think about it and wear irrelevant

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clothes

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cloths

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clothes

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which will end up affecting to

reputation

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the reputation

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of company and profession.

Also

, if no one will guide these

type

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types

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of employees

then

they don't get

idea

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the idea

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that they look unprofessional. To sum up, I totally disagree with

given

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statement that

employers

do not have to worry about

employess

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employees

atire

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attire

are

retire

.It is necessary to wear

decent

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a decent

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dress

work place

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workplace

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and for

that

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that employer

those employers

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employers

have their

uniform

or make some

guidlines

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guidelines

about

dress

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the dress

a dress

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Some people think employers should not care about the way their employees dress, but the quality at work. To what extent you agree or disagree?

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