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some people think that all university students should study whatever they like.others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future,such as those related to science and technology. discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Introduction
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 believe that all
university
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 students right to choose what academic discipline to
study
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 and we do not forget what they choose and what the better for the
futuremust
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future must
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Body paragraph 1
some argue that
student
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 just
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study
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 in the interested
course
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university
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for
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example
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 in developing
countries
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 there are many youth people and there are not many job
opportunity
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 for young people. in
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this
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countries
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 young people prefer to
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course
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becouse
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because
this
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 subject help us to find specialization and
then
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 find a proper job
Body paragraph 2
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hand
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 some
person
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people
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 do not agree about
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 subject.they believe that universities just apply students to
useful
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 in the future and society needs them.
for example
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 in developed countries
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university
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universities
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 just apply in cours of government offices and industrial factories needs.
Body paragraph 3
in my
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 if the students
study
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 in the
favorite
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course
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 we find
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 best way how to use it and
may be
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maybe
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 lead to entrepreneurship and
creat
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create
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 new opportunities.
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 it is difficult to choose a better subject to
study
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 in
university
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 but we can help
to
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student
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students
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 to choose
best
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course
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 and we
dont
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don't
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better
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a better
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 future

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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