In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasizes that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Businesses, without doubt, have been using advertising to increase
their
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sale rates of their
products
. (to boost their sales) for a long time. Nowadays, they are trying to influence
people
with
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saying that their
products
are novel and have new
features
compared to others. I believe that it is a positive improvement for them.
This
essay will discuss the reasons behind
this
trend and
then
explain the benefits it offers.
Emphizing
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Emphasizing
that the
products
are new is an effective way to attract
people
’s attention because ‘new/novelty’ means being improved. For
humans
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of
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‘new’ conjures up better
products
with better quality and better new
features
.
In other words
,
new
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the new
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technological device might be a device equipped with
better
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a better
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camera, audio system or any other better
features
. New
features
like that engage
people
’s attention. For
examle
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example
, I know many
people
who purchase
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iPhone
iphone
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an iphone
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whenever
new
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model is launched. They believe that the new phone they purchase is much better than their former phone.
Actually
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their behaviour is
merely
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/only because of commercials which introduce their new
products
as if they are nothing like the others before them. Apple produces a new
iphone
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iPhone
constantly and they usually have just a
little
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differences.
Nevertheless
,
people
continue to purchase. As long as businesses use the phrase ‘new’ in their ads they will be
succesfull
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successful
.
Although
it is not something positive for consumers, it is positive for businesses as they aim to increase their sales.They
try
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invest and develop their product.They might cheating
consumer
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consumers
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with
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not being honest in their advertising but in
business
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world
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this
is something usual.If they want to be successful they need to sell
products
.For that, they need to influence
people
therefore
marketing strategy that emphasizes new is positive for them.
As a result
of
this
attitude they gaining money. In conclusion,
businesses’s
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advertments
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advertisements
introduce their product as new some way and
this
is pretty wisely
behavior
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.In my
opinion
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this
way will help them to develop.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innovation
  • Fast-paced
  • Distinguishing
  • Psychological aspect
  • Inherently
  • Perceived
  • Continuous improvement
  • Revolutionary
  • Feasible
  • Throwaway culture
  • Undervalue
  • Longevity
  • Obscure
  • Novelty
  • Unsatisfactory
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