Obesity is a serious problem in many countries especially in rich countries discuss ways to solve the problem provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Obesity is a serious
problem
in many
countries
especially in rich
countries
discuss ways to solve the
problem
provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Matters related to overweight have posed a great challenge in rich
countries
there are solutions to
this
problem
as
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will be discussed in the essay. Obesity has caused serious threats to peoples health ranging from young
people
to the old .junk food has contributed to about 99
percent
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per cent
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of
this
problem
to the society with it being readily available and affordable not forgetting it is enticing and
mouth watering
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.A large number of
people
will opt out for faster foods ,
for instance
,over lunch break a big number of
people
will rush for fast food compared to healthy packed meals or a balanced diet
that is
slighlty
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slightly
high in terms of cost and grab a junk meal. In wealthy
countries
like The USA and
UK
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,UK
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people
are not active and they find cooking as a way of wasting time so the easiest and quick way is to rush to burger king and other
oulets
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outlets
and grab a meal remember
this
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these
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meals are not controlled and are taken in excess causing lifestyle
diseses
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diseases
disease
which again become expensive to treat and manage.
However
obesity is a disease just like any other condition that can be treated,cured and prevented,The community has not learnt the serious consequences that accompany excessive body
weight
sensitazation
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sensitization
on the pros and cons is necessary to help save the government and
indivuduals
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individuals
risks associated with excessive
weight
.
For example
with increased body
weight
conditions that are
reffered
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referred
to as lifestyle diseases are realised
this
include hypertension,diabetes among others to manage
this
condition a balanced healthy diet is the
first
requirement which is very much
achieavable
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achievable
.
Finally
,in
the
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modern society "A FAT "person is
reffered
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referred
offered
as
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wealthy,
this
is a myth and the community should have a different perspective,note there are "SLIM"
People
but unhealthy excessive
weight
is not a sign of prestige.Government should create awareness
caimpgain
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campaign
on
this
issue of
weight
in schools,hospitals and on our streets to save the masses from lifestyle diseases.
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