Some people believe that the fast pace and stress of modern life is having a negative effect on families To what extent do you agree or disagree
Many people feel that the high- speed and pressure of contemporary lifestyle are having a detrimental effect on
families
. I totally agree with this
notion that because the fast pace leads to less time
for families
to be together and stress leads to arguments among family members.
The main reason why I believe family life is being compromised is because
Replace the word
that
families
have less time
to be with each other. As individual family members are occupied with their work and social lives, so they have to less time
with their family. The high requirements of working schedules sometime
force people into working overtime, even at weekends to earn too much money and have opportunities for their career promotion. Replace the word
sometimes
Moreover
, since they have a little amount of time
left, they would spend it pursuing their own interest and hobbies such
as surfing facebook
, check email and so on. Change the capitalization
Facebook
For instance
, I stay in my room playing game and chatting with my friends as soon as I come home after school.
Secondly
, another reason why support the notion that families
are being adversely affect
is that the burden of modern life Change the verb form
being adversely affected
these day
may Change the determiner
this day
these days
leads
to get together are more likely. A person under pressure, Change the verb form
lead
they
feel Correct pronoun usage
apply
stress
out and extremely tired and usually irritated anyone else, Change the form of the verb
stressed
therefore
, we will weaken family bonding ourselves. To illustrate, after hard- working a day my mother will always get irritated with me about anything just due to small.
In conclusion, I totally agree with the notion that the rapid urbanizations and stressful conditions of new living are having harmful
Add an article
a harmful
influence
on family relationships.Fix the agreement mistake
influences
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- however
- although
- even though
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