Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society? Do you agree or disagree.

Today it is a trend to chase the latest novelties in
beauty
. Who do you see now on your way? The
women
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with plump lips and long eyelashes, dark wide eyebrows. In most
of
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cases
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they will be slim women with heavy makeup wearing the latest fashioned jeans or dresses whatever. The same thing with men. Today it
as
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quite popular to have
good
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body with wide shoulders and have
six-pack
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.
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I am an exponent of
healthy
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lifestyle
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life style
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. When you take care
about
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your health, the way you look and your shapes. As
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Latin phrase says “A healthy mind in a healthy body”. The problem is that persons who start chasing the ideal look very often can’t stop.
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they do one procedure,
then
they apply something new not understanding by doing
this
they
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destroy their natural
beauty
at all. Your body is not timeless, for sure there will be some factors like illnesses, gens peculiarities
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affect your body. So you will be unable to
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away from
this
. Garrison Keillor wrote: "
Beauty
isn't worth thinking about; what's important is your mind." The
second
part which I found makes
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even clearer. “You don’t want a fifty-dollar haircut on a fifty-cent head.” When a person has
a
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beauty
and nothing inside, is it interesting to communicate with her? Maybe for the
first
minutes about trends in
beauty
or cosmetics, but
then
you will find no interest to continue
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. I hope that in our world will be always respected mind, sharpness, initiative and creativity. And at the same
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I wish people chased getting and developing
such
qualities in themselves.
Such
things even time and age will not take away from you.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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