Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. how far do you agree or disagree with the above views

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after school can
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degree
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vacancies after school rather
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finding
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will
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as the best choice is
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, it is commonly believed by a segment of people that pursuing a degree at
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university is demanding nowadays.
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of all, completing studying will not only raise the knowledge but
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opportunities
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applications.
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, working
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a better employment sector is
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associated
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, it is good to continue studying. In conclusion,
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work
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experince
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experience
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it can be bad sometimes.
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, I believe continuing study after school
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the benefit that comes from gaining an early
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experience
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical knowledge
  • critical thinking skills
  • specialized expertise
  • on-the-job training
  • work experience
  • financial independence
  • career growth
  • hands-on experience
  • balanced perspective
  • internships
  • part-time work
  • academic learning
  • vocational training
  • apprenticeships
  • personal circumstances
  • financial constraints
  • career goals
  • individual aptitudes
  • well-paying careers
  • satisfying careers
  • specialized training
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