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Traffic problems in modern town and cities.discuss about cause and slutions

#traffic #town #cities #slutions
Traffic
congestion
 in modern
cities
 is a conservation issue.as grow up evolution of technology every single part of life has been affected that can be seen for the
road
 condition.
Traffic
congestion
 is caused by different factors,
such
 as
,
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 car accidents, bad weather, inadequate roadway capacity. lack of space on the
road
 had been considering as
a
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 most important reason for
traffic
. since there is no standard
road
 condition and the number of cars increased dramatically.
in other words
,
road
 and transport services suffer when they are overused.
moreover
, nowadays many
people
 have to find a good job opportunity move to the
cities
 so unplanned growth contributes to the
traffic
congestion
 of crowded metro place. No wonder in matristic lifestyle that everyone suffers from
epidemic
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 disease which is called hurry sickness, not many
people
 place a high value on driving role so
cities
 will be faced with enormous
traffic
. Eventually,
traffic
congestion
 makes a problem for City dwellers.
For example
, they have spent a lot of time in order to reach word or any takes they want to do .in additional
traffic
 causes air pollution
that is
 why
people
 who are accommodated in
cities
 are in danger with some problem related to health
such
 hear diseases lung cancer and so on. There are some suggestions to reduce
traffic
.
first
 and foremost is to encourage
people
 to use more public transport.so authorities should improve public transport and provide a safe network of walking and cycling. Another way to reduce
traffic
 is using radio reports or to apply automated
traffic
 management systems to optimize
traffic
 flow. Overall, in terms of ,issue it is a
necessary
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 to balance between
grow
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 the population, the
raise
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 in cars and the situation of the
road
. government should have more attention to city problem they have to know
traffic
 can affect another aspect of life and
people
 respect any role that put by their authorities .so we can be successful and go down
traffic
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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