In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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people
read newspapers. Some
people
see that
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and children watch TV
news
less than
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oldest
eldest
. We
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a solution There are many factories, which grabbed their attention no rea newspaper.
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my opinion that parents
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encourage children.
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. In Irland’s
government
had suggested parents to
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publicizes
their own
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news
about life. In
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these actions increased newspapers and magazines In
kindergardens
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kindergartens
kindergarten
and schools. Indeed young
people
love watching TV –
cartunes
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car tunes
and shows for children as reason as it forebitten advertisement and
news
for instance
in China some regions.
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stopped it on the children’s channels as they made
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a decision
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about bringing some hurt of
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the young
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brain is bounded with
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a big
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quantity of crime. Some
people
protesting
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it. In conclusion correct and good
news
help to develop their
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and
communicative
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into society.
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government
should establish
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way, like Ireland’s
government
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