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Some people believe that good leaders are born, whereas others hold the opinion that the leadership qualities could be obtained during the life. Who represents the good leader qualities indeed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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What will be the true quality of a good
leader
? Some
people
 argue that good
leaders
 are inherited, while others think that the qualities of
leadership
 can be obtained during life. In my opinion, I agree with the idea that
people
 can learn
leadership
 qualities without inheritance because
people
 learn through when they have a failed
experience
.
To begin
 with,
people
 can acquire
leadership
 skills through their life by their
experience
 of failure. Nothing is more important than
experience
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the experience
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, so if someone wants to be a
leader
, they might have
experience
 of the
leader
. Even though their ability to be a
leader
 wasn't good, it can be fixed through admit their faulty and find a better way. It might be hard to decide to recognize their fault, but
people
 around them can help to find their errors. Through these experiences being failed and fixed, they can be a better
leader
 than before.
In addition
, good
leaders
 can be a person who
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listens
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listen
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tolisten
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 other person's opinions well. It's a fundamental component of treat
people
 even normal
people
, but there are a few
people
 who keep these rules. The reason why
this
 feature is so important is
leaders
 have the potential of abusing the authority of
leaders
.
For example
, a
leader
 is a person who represents other
people
's voices, so it is very important to listen to what other
people
 are saying. They shouldn't decide things in their own way and thoughts. In conclusion, there are
people
 who think
leadership
 qualities are decided when they are born. ,
However
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 I think it can be obtained and increased through the
experience
 of unsuccessful.
Also
, to be a good
leader
, it is essential to
listen
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tolisten
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 other
people
's thoughts.
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