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Some people believe that good leaders are born, whereas others hold the opinion that the leadership qualities could be obtained during the life. Who represents the good leader qualities indeed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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What will be the true quality of a good
leader
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? Some
people
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 argue that good
leaders
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 are inherited, while others think that the qualities of
leadership
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 can be obtained during life. In my opinion, I agree with the idea that
people
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 can learn
leadership
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 qualities without inheritance because
people
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 learn through when they have a failed
experience
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.
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people
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 can acquire
leadership
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 skills through their life by their
experience
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 of failure. Nothing is more important than
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experience
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the experience
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, so if someone wants to be a
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, they might have
experience
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 of the
leader
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. Even though their ability to be a
leader
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 wasn't good, it can be fixed through admit their faulty and find a better way. It might be hard to decide to recognize their fault, but
people
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 around them can help to find their errors. Through these experiences being failed and fixed, they can be a better
leader
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 than before.
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, good
leaders
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 can be a person who
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listens
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listen
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 other person's opinions well. It's a fundamental component of treat
people
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 even normal
people
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, but there are a few
people
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 who keep these rules. The reason why
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 feature is so important is
leaders
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 have the potential of abusing the authority of
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.
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, a
leader
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 is a person who represents other
people
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's voices, so it is very important to listen to what other
people
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 are saying. They shouldn't decide things in their own way and thoughts. In conclusion, there are
people
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 who think
leadership
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 qualities are decided when they are born. ,
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However
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 I think it can be obtained and increased through the
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 of unsuccessful.
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, to be a good
leader
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, it is essential to
listen
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 other
people
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's thoughts.
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