Many feel that happiness is mainly an individual responsibility, while others feel that there are important external factors. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays , most people argue , to be happy is mainly the duty of a human being where others

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that there are some other crucial points leading to

happiness

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. In my opinion ,

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its

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the responsibility of an individual to be heady , some other factors are

also

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playing a vital role in

happiness

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with , the

person

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should be strong enough . As if anything bad happens in his

life

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like if he does not get a good result of his long hard work , it's the

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person

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duty to tackle that situation and does not let that situation be heavy on himself because he has the option to try again .

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, the individual should have control

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his emotions . Even though there are many emotional moments in his

life

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where it is not important to be sad , he does not have to pay attention to those silly things and try to be busy with his own development .

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, there are some other points which are important for

happiness

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. Situations in

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. For ,example if a

person

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tried a lot even after his failure and he is able to achieve that goal or job but when it is time to join , the accident

is occur

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and he loses somebody parts now what he will do ? How he can be happy ? So the situation must be good to be happy . The family should be supportive . As the family is playing a crucial role in everyone's

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, they have to support their child in his doing because if guardian stop their offspring

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from

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doing what he wants to do or he is doing

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it really affects his

happiness

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. In conclusion ,

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, the

person

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should be strong enough , situations in the

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and support by the family is playing a vital role in his

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 7.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Individual responsibility
External factors
Personal choices
Mindset
Attitude
Mental health
Self-improvement
Socioeconomic status
Financial stability
Social relationships
Supportive family
Environment
Living conditions
Neighborhood safety
Cultural factors
Interplay
Dispositions
Case studies
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