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Band 4

some people say it is more important to plant trees in the open spaces in towns and cities than to build more housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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open areas for planting or building more houses has become a debatable issue. In my opinion, I agree that
trees
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 and gardens play a vital role in human development. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain my point of view and give supporting reasons.
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 with, the cultivation of more
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 in urban settings benefits city dwellers in a variety of ways.
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, extra tree shade is generated when more
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 are planted in open areas, which not only promotes the aesthetics of the city but
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 helps to lower the city's temperature.
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, it provides more space
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 elders and youngsters to do some physical activities in
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 relaxing environment.
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, these plants assist in reducing urban air pollution and noise levels and promote higher living standards. Experts have discovered that tree leaves are great absorbers, especially of carbon dioxide and dust.
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,
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 generate oxygen, which can help to reduce pollution in cities and improve air quality.
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, it is true that more housing means more places to live. But it cannot be ignored that people are suffering from
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 air pollution and the only solution to protect them is to plant more
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.
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,
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 mass urbanization, the need for
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 and gardens has drastically increased to improve the quality of life in overcrowded cities.
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,
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 and gardens are natural combats that can help protect against various man-made disasters.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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